Thesis! Thesis!

I think I've found a better thesis. Or a better way to express my thesis and supporting ideas. 

Thesis

The concern with ambition, legitimacy, and family relationships gone wrong in Shakespeare's plays are stemmed in how these issues affected the Tudor dynasty and shaped the world of sixteenth and early seventeenth-century England. 

Supporting arguments:

• Ambition in Shakespeare's characters is a corrupting and self-destructive characteristic because it was often the same case for the ambitious power-seekers who lived in the Tudor court.
• The legitimacy of characters in Shakespeare is fixed by birth but is subject to legal changes by those with authority as was often the case in the Tudor period.
• Family relationships in both the Tudor dynasty and in Shakespeare's plays arise from personal betrayal or merely the fear of betrayal, but in both cases this leads to a betrayal of familial responsibilities. 
  
  
  I feel better now that I've sort of crystalized what I want to talk about. The finer details of the points may change depending on further research.