I Like What Rachel Writes

I read through Rachel's paper and was really intrigued. I especially loved the following sentence:

In reality, this rejection of the romance of The Winter’s Tale is predicated on an inability to recognize that the romantic elements of the play—its mixture of genres and supernatural elements—are in fact what makes it realistic.

This is an awesome thesis, though I will admit I get a little lost in its twists, it makes senses if you think about it for just a second. I'm not sure if there's a way to make this clearer, but in any case, I like it a lot.

I also found Rachel's use of secondary sources excellent. The way she incorporated her correspondence with Dr. Young and his personal experience from the classroom had the nice effect of bringing a personal anecdote into the paper without losing its academic register.

One thing that I could see Rachel could improve about her paper is her transitions. I'm pretty sure she's already planning on improving this in her next draft as she had the sections numbered, but I think it'll be a key component to the overall quality of the final draft, so I wanted to draw her attention to it.

I've kind of watched/heard Rachel's idea develop over the past few weeks and I really like where she's gone with it. Great work, Rachel.