Comments on Nyssa's Paper

Nyssa, I though you did a great job with your paper. I only have one or two things to say. I couldn't find a good image to go with them, though (I already used Thumbs and Ammo, and I promised myself I'd stop using so many animated gifs), so I think I might not post an image this time.
I thought your analysis was generally pretty strong, except in your last paragraph. I recognize this is still a rough draft, but I had a hard time following your reasoning in your final paragraph.

Also, I noticed you started a couple sentences with "And." I know that's not technically against the rules, but in this more-formal setting, it sounds a little funny. Could you find a different way to say things?

Finally, what about using the line "I see the world feelingly" as part of your title? That seems to fit well.

Once again, good job. I through your use of your primary and secondary sources was very good, and nothing to complain about there.

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