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| An adult Sarai, at her finest. |
I do not think that I am quite mature--
My schoolwork is enough to prove my claim.
I do my best--now that I know for sure.
But sometimes things continue just the same.
And as for rest I think I'm in a drought!
I schedule naps to maximize my time.
Degrees are worth my lack of sleep, no doubt!
But at this point, just dropping out sounds prime.
And I won't even start on being broke-
At least this month I easily made rent.
It seems my money just goes up in smoke-
And each new check is treasure-heaven sent!
And in the end I see no single win
So I'll call Mom and ask to move back in.
I hope that I have all the meter correct! I tweaked the lines my partner and I talked about in class.
Thanks!
I identify with this sonnet so much!! There isn't much enjambment, though, so while the meter seems to read well, it's very choppy since almost each line sounds like a complete sentence/phrase.
ReplyDeleteI always struggle with enjambment in poems! I'm not sure why that particular device is so difficult for me
DeleteHaha I agree with Erin. Let's all drop out and live at mom's house. I think adding spaces between every four lines would help to notify the reader that the subject and the rhyme scheme is moving forward. I found myself a little lost at one point because I didn't recognize a transition.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback! That's a pretty easy change to make :)
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