The grilled cheese is a gift from gods on high,
A monument to cold days, long and rainy.
I curl up, watch the rain droplets pass by
And munch on mozzarella burnt yet creamy.
Best friends with soup, the grilled cheese likes to swim—
Lentil, chicken noodle, or potato.
With beans and broccoli my bowl does brim,
But I like grilled cheese most dipped in tomato.
Though perfect in a chilly thunderstorm
Or as the end to worn out sleepy days,
This sandwich is not fit for summers warm
I much prefer a juicy fruit buffet.
While strawberries are sweet and mangoes tart,
Grilled cheese will always stay close to my heart.
I really like your sonnet! Great subject choice, because I really enjoy cheese as well. There are a few lines that have too many syllables, so I would just go through and switch those around. I'm not the best at noticing iambic pentameter though, sorry. I think in your third set of couplets you should talk more about cheese. Those lines just don't feel as cheese centered as they could be. Overall though I think it's great. Go cheese!
ReplyDeleteI really like your sonnet! Great subject choice, because I really enjoy cheese as well. There are a few lines that have too many syllables, so I would just go through and switch those around. I'm not the best at noticing iambic pentameter though, sorry. I think in your third set of couplets you should talk more about cheese. Those lines just don't feel as cheese centered as they could be. Overall though I think it's great. Go cheese!
ReplyDeleteI want a grilled cheese sandwich now... ;)
ReplyDeleteThis title definitely caught my attention, and I was not disappointed! It's so funny and cute! I think all of us can side with you on grilled cheese!
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